Comments Made During the Contest

Alex Hollister (Level 4)

That's one BIG deus-ex machina of a co-ink-adink of a premise you have there. Two roommates just so happen to have conditions that are not a million miles away from diametric opposites of each other.

As concepts go, in terms of feasibility, that's one TOUGH SELL.

Sorry. I like this kind of use of tragic irony, but I'm really struggling to see how you'll tackle this premise without it seeming the most unlikely coincidence.

I would imagine Emetophobia is remarkably rare a condition and Bulimia isn't exactly rife. I'm just not believing these two would meet as roommates.

Too much to swallow........ sorry..... that's just tasteless.

It gets a FAIR based on the fact that it's a nice attempt at a story. And that maybe you find a way to make this work in the script.

Aralis Bloise (Level 4)

I can see this being an interesting short, but I don't see how there could be enough story for a full length script. There might be, but then I'm sure there are more aspects to your story and you need to include them in your logline.

Ayal Pinkus (Level 5)

I have a hard time empathizing with the protagonist... Breakdown-inducing fear of vomit? If you can't stand vomit, it will make you gag, not break down I think... A fragile girl and a bulimic roommate, they both feel passive. I don't think the idea of watching a passive protagonist and antagonist and vomit would entice me to see the movie...

Basil Sunshine (Level 4)

The contrast here is clever - though unlikely and overdone [see surgeon afraid of blood, etc etc] almost to the point of it being humorous. I mean, I'm trying to visualize this and I can only come up with really disgusting and horrible and funny stuff, when it sounds like you are going for drama. But maybe you can pull it off.

Bill Clar (Level 5)

Title: It could be better phrased. I like "Sickly" better.

Story: A girl that's afraid of vomit must face up to bulimia?

This could work as a quirky comedy, as I just can't take this illness seriously. It's rife with comedic opportunities.

Why does the girl have to conquer vomit in order to help the bulimic? Bulimics do not vomit 24/7. Once she comes out of the bathroom, the girl can help her and not have to face her demons.

Craft: Remove the dash after "breakdown".

Concise with a clearly defined story.

Bill Sarre (Level 4)

Title - like this. i'm going to guess comedy, with a relationship at its hear, lets see...

Protagonist - fragile girl

Antagonist - her phobia, herself coupled with friend

Genre - drama

Other - now thats an interesting scenario. real fear in you face - twin disorders. i think that would be a real challenge to write.

the log line is crisp, needs an explanation - could that be done better and differently?

well done, thats worth a try.

Bob Johnson (Level 4)

The title helps connect with the logline but I wasn't keen on the way you chose to explain what 'emetophobia' was, might have been better if you had simply gone with the definition in the first place.

I'd like to see this story make it into feature length, I think you may have a tough task on your hands.

Brian Howell (Level 5)

I kind of get a horror vibe from the title, but the logline cries drama, so I'm a little confused about it. The title works, but it might need a little reworking.

The logline seems to hit all the marks. I like that you have teamed up a person with a fear of vomiting and a bulimic person. These are the kinds of situations that write themselves, almost, don't they. Great job there.

That all said, it just isn't pulling me in that much. Perhaps it's the fact that they are roommates. I keep thinking that if the girl with the phobia is so debilitated by vomit, the bulimic's friends could really step-in and help her. If you were to indicate that the girl with the phobia is the only hope for this other girl, it would probably put a lot more at stake here. Also, there is a chance that the audience might be more interested in the bulimic girl's story than your chosen protagonist.

If I was a producer I would strongly consider this script, but I wouldn't quite request anything yet.

Byron Matthews (Level 4)

Title -- The title doesn't really work for me.

Story -- Interesting and original idea, but can it be turned into a feature length script? I guess we'll find out. This story seems like there's going to be a lot dialogue and self-discovery.

Craft -- I like the style of the logline, and you have a pretty good grasp of writing one. The story subject doesn't peak my interest, but based on how the logline is written. I wouldn't mind reading the first ten pages.

Caroline Coxon (Mod Emeritus)

Good title and very interesting idea BUT I wonder how this could be sustained for a whole 120 minute film? It seems like a one or two scene premise the way it's been portrayed in your logline.r

Chris Keaton (Level 5)

I don't think this is a comedy, but for some reason I was laughing. Why not lose the scientific term and just describe her fear. I just don't see a pay off in this. I get that the bulimic girl could get a modeling contract -or rather- die, so the consequences are grim, but...the struggle appears to be internal for the protag and internal doesn't make good film. Could her demons be real?

Chris Messineo (Founder)

Extra points for originality. I am fascinated by the characters. However, I'm having a hard time imagining this as a feature. There doesn't seem to be enough story or plot. It might actually be there, but it's not in your logline.

Still, these characters and the conundrum feels so fresh, that I hope I get to read the first ten pages.

Chris Westfield (Level 3)

I like the dramatic irony. One who fears vomit pit against one who vomits, however it's a bit silly. It's written simply and to the point and I appreciate the fact that you can boil down the essence of the film in one sentence. Title works.

Christopher Pedersen Cook (Level 3)

Sounds very interesting, very different. I'm sort of at a loss for what to say on this one. The logline is entirely clear. It makes sense. However, I feel like there should be more. I just can't envision how this would fill an entire movie.

Dan Delgado (Level 5)

This is very good logline. Completely original, concise, clear and lets me know what the story is about. My only problem is, is there enough story here to sustain a feature-length movie? Other than that (and that's my subjective opinion) well done.

Thank you for entering. Good luck.

Dave Kunz (Level 4)

I like this one. But I do think it has some issues. I had to read the logline 2 or 3 times to really get it, and I still stumble over the "breakdown - inducing fear of vomit" part which is, imo, a tricky bit of description to pull off properly. I would perhaps change it to: "A fragile girl with a morbid fear of vomit must learn to..." (etc.). I like this story because I could imagine it being about someone who is forced to do the right thing out of selfishness as much as altruism. And then there's the title. It's hard to imagine "Never been sicker" on a marquee or selling a lot of tickets. Then again it's so far over the top that it's pretty much a grabber. It could work in your favor, at least in the early phases of marketing.

David Birch (Level 5)

interesting subject and tight delivery are a plus...not sure the title really grabs me...i might start off with something a little more enticing..say, "when a girl discovers her roommate is bulimic,..."...that way you focus the reader more on the "inciting incedent"...

David D. DeBord (Level 5)

My first reaction from the title is that this must be a comedy. Obviously the story doesn’t support that but again, something about the title sent me down the wrong road. The basic story I think is there in the logline. Probably a bit dramatic of a film, maybe not one I would really be interested in, but nonetheless potentially a compelling story with wide appeal. I am troubled by the terminology and need for definition within the logline. It slows the read, I have to stop and think about the definition while trying to read the rest of the logline. A “fragile girl plagued” speaks volumes about her character and “must learn to cope” tells me her journey so my sense is that I would not plug in the terminology and definition. I think it distracts. This could be an important story, something for our society to address.

David M Troop (Level 4)

Title:
Doesn't sound enticing to me. Fits your movie though.
Story:
I think the relationship has to be stronger than just roommates, otherwise, there's nothing keeping the sick girl from moving out. Could they be sisters?
Original? Yes. At last, a movie that focuses on vomit.
Protag is the fragile girl? Antag is the bulimic girl?
Feels like a extra gross John Waters movie. (Google him.)
Craft:
Style is not bad. Spelling is good. Grammar is good. Not sure about all the hyphens.
I gave your logline a GOOD.
If I have to read your script in August, I will be sure to keep a waste basket nearby.

Denise Jewell (Level 4)

Title - Interesting but maybe a little flippant. Doesn't seem to have the serious tone that I think this story has. Story/Craft= good job of geeting the story across in one sentence. I still want more info, however. I can see the conflict and her goal but I want more reasons to route for her.

Faith Friese Nelson (Level 5)

I suppose the title goes with the logline. And the logline is well written. But, I really do not think I'd ever want to watch a movie whose main premise seems to be about vomit. Good luck with the screenplay.

Felipe D. Machado (Level 4)

I like the title. Catches my attention right away.

I think this is a pretty interesting premise to go with. My only worry is what is going to keep this story going? It feels like a short film right now.Are there any backstories or twists you can reveal to make the logline a little more enticing to the reader?

I think you crafted the logline well, but maybe it needs a little extra to fel more like a feature.

Good luck!

Fred Koszewnik (Level 5)

I'm genuinely sorry but your title and the content of your logline makes me want to pull away instead of grabbing my attention and causing me to want to pick up your screenplay. And please understand that I'm not frightened of difficult subjects. I'm left wondering why I feel this way? Maybe it's because I wasn't familiar with the word "emetophobia" and guess that most other non-specialist people aren't either. And then to have it explained as "inducing fear of vomit" feels like a further unpleasant slap across my face. You are taking on serious issues with wonderful possibilities for conflict and drama. How can you write a logline that hooks interest and makes one want to get closer, not farther away. Don't educate me. Entertain me. Continued good success and hope this honest criticism is helpful.

Gary Rademan (Level 5)

Ew, but I feel compelled to watch.

Appropriate title.

Weave a little more story in to prevent it from being a one note solution. It's odd or fortunate when the protag has the one flaw that matches up with the character she has to save.

"Must learn to cope" can be shortened or made active. Right now you have a movie that ends as soon as she learns. I know that's ridiculous but that's how it reads.

GOOD!

Greg Tonnon (Level 5)

I like the title as it relates well to the story. The logline is good; short and to the point yet overviews the story well. I hope this is a comedy or at least has comic elements as I find an emetophobiac with a bulimic roommate very funny!

James Hughes (Level 5)

Story - I am not sure whether this is a comedy or not. I am assuming it is since you are paring these two sicknesses up together and the title doesn't seem to be treating the situation in a serious manner. But the logline doesn't give any other indication that it is a comedy and so I am confused. Either way, this concept does not seem to have enough legs to make an entire movie, at least based on the info in the logline.

I am rating as a fair.

JeanPierre Chapoteau (Moderator)

First impression: I don't see where this movie could go.

It sounds like a comedy, but is it? I mean, she wants to help her roommate, but she has a fear of vomit. Even though her friend is bulimic, it's not like she watches her throw up. I think it would be simple - as simple as helping a person suffering from bulimia can get - to help her friend. I don't think she needs to ever be in contact with vomit.

I guess the logline is okay, but again, the story doesn't add up so I can't really judge the logline.

Jem Rowe (Level 4)

This logline has the basis for a good story but confuses me with its conflicts of tone. The title sounds whimsical and comical, but the logline itself indicates a very dark and serious story.

Also, "spiraling out of control" is to vague to generate much intruige, be a bit more specific about the concequences and where we can expect this story to go.

Jo Gates (Level 3)

Picturing this as a feature is a bit difficult, although there are solid story elements. The tone hits me as dramatic, movie-of-the-week-ish. If the bulimia and phobia and friendship are all treated seriously, this could be a good example of that genre.

Jordan Littleton (Level 4)

Is this a comedy? A girl with an incapacitating fear of vomit, must learn to cope with her problem in order to save her bulimic roommate? That could be funny I guess. If it's not a comedy, then I'm not sure how you could make an entire movie about this.

Kelley Allen (Level 3)

Technically, a really good logline. However, this logline is missing some sort of hook. Add another element and this could be a big winner here.

Khamanna Iskandarova (Level 5)

Your logline is clear to me. I see the genre and the story from this.
As to the movie - it's not my cup of tea, I'm afraid. Not talking about the genre here but the plot itself. The logline tells me that the plot is simple, is it? I'm not into simplicity in features. However, the logline is good, I think and I must rate on that.

Kim M Brantley (Level 3)

The title is good but could use a bit of finessing to give it more impact. It gives a good indication of what is to come in the logline.

The logline clearly sets up the story and creates great tension.

You have identified a clear protagonist in the girl with a disabling fear of vomit, and then you create even greater irony by confronting her with a bulimic roommate. I love it!

The genre is clear in that this is a thriller.

My only criticism is that vague comments such as "cope with her demons" do not give detail or create a visual picture. Your logline is concise and to the point so you have room to work with the words in order to flesh out your story more.

Kirk White (Level 5)

i'm giving this an excellent...a quirky and twisted concept that MUST be made. if you don't place, please send me this script to read!!

Kisha King (Level 4)

I like the title it sounds funny
The logline is okay maybe a few more details more would give the story a tone.
What are the girl demons? What will the girl do to help her roommate.

KP Mackie (Level 5)

This story appears to be a drama.
The logline is certainly well written. There's a clear protagonist in this sick girl with a goal "to save her...roommate." The antagonist must be the emetophobia illness. Hopefully, she and the bulimic girlfriend will share some meaningful moments.
Not sure that this premise could support a feature. Even if the characters are well developed, the subject matter may be too difficult to sustain for any length of time. Might have a difficult time persuading an audience that the material is substantial enough.
The title seems to be a perfect fit.

Kyle Patrick Johnson (Level 5)

How convenient is it that someone suffering from an incredibly obscure phobia just happens to have a bulimic roommate? I mean, what are the odds? I mean, really, what are the odds?

My point is that a real-life story like this has to be believable. Hardly anyone's going to believe emetophobia, or at least suspend their disbelief. Most people find vomit funny. How are you going to turn that around and help us experience someone's fear and loathing of vomit?

Margaret Ricke (Level 5)

Love the title.

The concept makes me think it's a comedy, but the wording makes it sound like a drama. You could go either way with this, or both. A logline should give the reader some idea of the genre.

Other than that, this is pretty good.

Marnie Mitchell Lister (Level 5)

Whoa. A lot of medical info here. LOL. I don't know what to say about this logline. A girl who has a phobia about vomit has to save her roommate who has bulimia. Sounds really crazy. And the way this is written it doesn't feel like a feature length idea. So you need to tell us more...and we don't need exact medical info.

Martin Jensen (Level 5)

This is a funny ironic contrast for two characters, but I'm not entirely sure it can sustain a full movie.

Maybe be more specific about what she does to help her friend? I don't really know how another person could help someone with bulimia.

But this is a funny idea anyway. Good.

Masoud Soheili (Level 4)

It seems introvert script, and I liked this kind of films,not so keen on the title
and not so clear logline and I couldn't find easy your story,
I want to know more about character,story and... but nothing obvious here,

Matthew Fettig (Level 5)

The title definitely caught my eye. I think it works well.

I think this line is very good. I'm not so sure how well others will judge you on having to provide a definition in the logline, but it saved me from having to look it up!

The characters are easily understood and the situation presents a natural conflict. I don't know that I'd want to watch a movie that may have to show the purge / breakdown scenario several times however. I get the sense this is more of a slow moving drama, but as a logline I think you've done well.

Michael Hughes (Level 4)

A woman deeply afraid of throwing up has to save her roommate from throwing up all the time?
The title works well, but I'm afraid the promise of what is in store doesn't make me want to read more.
I have to assume there is some complicating issues or more story involved for a full length script. I think more of that story needs to be included. As is. it is just a story about throwing up.

MJ Hermanny (Level 5)

Title does not enthuse me to see this film, it sounds really depressing and I don't particularly want to read a script about someone really ill. Suggests the genre is a drama.

Oh boy, it's about vomit!! really? And it doesn't seem to be a comedy.

You've got all the right ingredients in place for a good logline:

hero = fragile girl who is phobic about vomit

goal = save her bulimic room-mate

obstacle = her phobia

the ingredients just do not thrill me and i can't see how this will fill 90 minutes.

the goal is not strong enough for me, why doesn't she get her roomie professional help?

I would not like to read this but have given you a good as it is well constructed.

Mohammad Nawaz (Level 4)

So it reads like a comedy but then you write "A fragile girl" which makes me think it's one of those "Teenager murders everybody at school" type deal. After saying that, I'm still gonna assume this is a comedy.

The problem here is that your logline doesn't mention what happens if her roommate does spiral out of control. Sure, you don't have to write it but I think it should only be when it's something obviously bad. Like the end of the world, or somebody being murdered.

This was close to being a very good but the story didn't interest me, sorry to say. At least it was well written. :)

Nick Miranda (Level 4)

This is a great logline. You have some character descriptions, goals, oppositions to those goals, and actions that will be taken. You are also taking a bold chance with the material, since there are not many movies (that haven’t been on Lifetime) dealing with this subject matter.

A word of caution, however, would be to be careful that your vomiting scenes don’t turn too comical. I know you can’t have a movie about bulimia without puke, but too much becomes comically gross, whereas too little loses your point. Sometimes, even the most gut-wrenching moments on screen can suffer from comedic fallacy. You intend it to be emotionally powerful, but it comes off as silly. Just look at some of the after-school movies they used to show.

Again, great logline.

Paul De Vrijer (Level 5)

I really like the logline, but I think overcoming your fear of vomit is really a shoddy motivation to base a film around. But all the elements are there, including the flaw. Hope this involves a bit more than just getting over that phobia. If only she worked at a bulumia clinic. I also wonder how much you can show vomit in one film without it boosting the rating beyond R.

Pete Barry (Level 5)

John Waters is crying out to make this movie. I, for one, am not crying out to see it, or read it.

But I'm grading for craft, here, and You've executed the idea flawlessly. You've got a colorful protagonist, stakes, obstacles - and the whole arc of the movie is built towards the main character overcoming her fear. If there's anything wrong with it, it's that I can't get, from the logline, whether or not the movie is going to take itself seriously - it could go either way. Still, this is the kind of idea that doesn't really lend itself to mainstream categorization.

You deserve to move on, but take this in the best possible way - I can't say I'm looking forward to reading the first ten pages.

Philip Whitcroft (Level 5)

The title works well, although I think I might have expected a slasher horror movie.

The concept has a good fresh feel too it. I like the dramatic potential of putting two troubled people together who have such a clear conflict. A hesistation I'm having is that I'm wondering if this story line is the kind of thing that makes up a single story thread in a wider story.

The logline works well. The fact that you have to stop to explain what the phobia is takes some of the energy out of it, but I'm not sure what you can do about that.

Reginald McGhee (Level 0)

The title is clear. It suggests that a fragile girl needs to cope with the fear of vomit to save a friend, which is also the setup of the story. The protagonist moves the story forward. Although she didn’t cause her friend to become bulimic, it is an obstacle she must face and overcome.

The protagonist is the fragile girl. Her goal is to overcome her fear of vomit, so that her friend won’t be bulimic anymore. The goal illustrates a serious problem, and I can sure root for the protagonist.

The antagonistic force is her fear of vomit. She needs to overcome that fear, which is a nice obstacle she needs. The antagonist is not included in the logline. I guess the fear of vomit is also the antagonist of the logline. The ally is there. Her bulimic roommate is the ally, who causes problems to both the protagonist and antagonist. The stakes are high as well. If she fails to overcome her fear, her friend might die or something from bulimia.

The originality of this script makes me want to see a movie like this. I don’t think I have ever saw a movie that involves emetophobia. Other than this, I haven’t notice any grammar errors.

The genre must be drama, or Comedy-Drama. It has some irony to this logline.

Rick Hansberry (Moderator)

Wow, you've pitted the hero against something that someone else suffers from. Not only does the hero have to struggle to overcome her phobia to save her roommate - She has to save her roommate. I think the deflection of having the ultimate goal be with someone other than your protagonist will ultimately work against this story. We can root for our hero and it's admirable for her to sacrifice to save her roommate but ultimately, for her, overcoming a phobia to help a friend doesn't feel like it would be a satisfying resolution after the trials of a feature film. Not crazy about the title and even if it is correct grammer, it again focuses on the supporting role rather than the hero of the story.

Robert Chipman (Level 4)

There is nothing particularly wrong with this logline, but this really doesn't seem like an idea I want to see more of. There doesn't seem to be major conflict here. I mean, one girl can move away and the other can try to get help for bulimia. I don't see a lot of struggle that can happen with the idea you laid in this logline. There is nothing majorly wrong with this, so I rate this as good.

Rustom Irani (Moderator)

I love the title and the premise is 100% original, have to give you that.

But making this particular phobia your USP is quite a challenging task, since the visual aspect alone is cringeworthy for quite a few people.

Also, the premise, as it stands right now isn't seen all the way through.

Why must SHE save her bulimic roommate?

Is there no other option? Why?

Are they college, adult, teen room-mates? What do they do? The setting for the story?

I need these details to place these characters in that setting and see where you're taking me.

Right now I get a vibe of either comedy or drama and am not sure what this story is really about besides a girl afraid of vomit trying to help one who induces vomit.

A backdrop and end result has to be hinted at for the girl with the phobia, so that I am intrigued to watch the film.

Will helping the bulimic end up curing her, reward her and result in little to no puke seen on screen?

Sally Meyer (Moderator)

The logline is short and to the point, which is in its favor. I'm not sure I want to watch a movie about a bulimic girl though, but I gave it a good because i know exactly what this story is about. A producer could read this and decide pass or consider right away, because it's easy to read and understand.

Sean Chipman (Level 4)

This doesn't seem like a very fun movie, does it? That's not a dig against you or your logline but it almost seems like too small of an idea, at least to me. You don't mention any possible sub-plots going on and there's a plot hole people might bring up here or they might not. Even though it would make her character unlikeable, the main character could always move to a new room (you don't specify whether or not it's a college dorm or if they're leasing an apartment or what...) if it were that much of a bother to her.

Anyway, I'm not seeing a whole lot going on here and what I am seeing, I'm not really liking. It just seems too small, no information, no side stories. Nothing. Like I said, I couldn't even tell you what kind of roommates they are because you didn't tell me.

Fair.

Sylvia Dahlby (Level 5)

Barfing! Gotta love the premise of this story. But wouldn't she just get another roommate?

Tim Westland (Moderator)

Title... Sounds like a comedy, but the logline does not. Bummer.
Logline... Tough to have a little known affliction be the source of a story. That hobbles your logline. I think you can tighten that up and make it more compelling. Spiraling out of control is not strong stakes.

Travis DeStein (Level 5)

This just seems silly. A person phobic of vomit has to save her bullimic friend? Really!? It's so ridiculous. Although, if this is a Farrelly Brothers-type comedy and not a serious drama (I'll assume it is) then this could definitely work.

Trent Carroll (Level 4)

Great title for the screenplay but it will unfortunately deter a lot of audiences from the movie. An audience wouldn't want to risk seeing something gross, and if they are told that this is movie is called, "Never Been Sicker", their minds will immediately go to the grossest things they could imagine.

I'm glad that you explained emetophobia, because most people would have to take out a dictionary when they see that word. I would have chosen to use commas instead of dashes, but it doesn't really matter in this situation.

You've presented an imperfect character that most overcome an obstacle in order to help another character. I'm just concerned with whether or not there is enough of a story here.

Overall, this dramatic piece is not perfect. Much like vomit scares away your main character, the title may scare away an audience for the movie. Also, I've shared my concerns about the amount of story you could have. I'd hate for there to be long periods of times where not much happens. However, with that in mind, I'm giving this logline a Very Good. The dramatic elements and conflict are enthralling enough to catch my interest, so good job.

William Coleman (Level 5)

I fear your title would be a turn-off to many. The content of your logline also affects me in the same way, even though your subject matter is worthy of dramatization. I do have one problem: I am not sure of whether your screenplay is a comedy or a drama. A person who vomits easily paired with a person who vomits a lot can go either way. You need to give us a hint as to which direction this script goes. I also sense that this may be a conflict for a short screenplay rather than a long one. If a comedy, the roommate barfs at inappropriate times. That could also be true if you take a dramatic approach. How do you send me a signal in your logline as to which way you are going is something you need to solve.

William D. Prystauk (Level 5)

Boom! This totally rocks. The perfect fear for the worst possible scenario. I love the juxtaposition, contrast and conflict. Excellent work and a rock solid logline to boot - short, sharp and definitive. Well done!

Killer title as well.

I can't wait to read the script!

William Dunbar (Level 5)

Ew! I think I got emetophobia just by reading this logline! Anyway, the logline is clear and concise and gives a good idea of the script. I'm a bit worried that the premise of the film may be a bit obscure. I suppose the bulemia aspect can be pretty serious, but "fear of vomit" seems less compelling to me than, say, cancer or AIDS as a driving medical condition. But good job on the logline itself.

Zach Jansen (Level 4)

This is probably just me, but I never like using demons in a logline. I automatically go to supernatural stuff. Perhaps using "illness" or "ailment" instead, though I know those might not be as strong as you'd like.

This feels very TV Movie of the Week. Not necessarily a bad thing, but this doesn't feel like a feature film.

Where are these characters roommates? You say "girl" for the protag, so I was thinking middle school or high school age, but then the roommate implies college. I think that should be made clearer.

I'm not sensing many obstacles other than the protag trying not to freak out when her roommate vomits -- and, to a larger question, how would the protag freak out when her roommate vomits? Is she throwing up right in front of her? Inviting her into the bathroom to watch? I'm buying that.

What relationship do these characters have? If they're just roommates then why help? Most people would just move out if things weren't working right. If they're lifelong friends, however, then there's something more going on. But then the question of how long has the roommate been bulimic and why is it only now becoming an issue?

Too many questions and lapses in logic for this to really work for me.

Comments Made After the Contest

Chris Messineo (Founder) ~ 3/1/2012 12:21 AM

So cool to discover that this was yours. You're so talented. Now, go get famous so I can tell everyone I taught you.

Margaret Ricke (Level 5) ~ 3/1/2012 9:18 AM

I really liked this. Write the feature!!! It'll sell!

Claire Fishman (Level 3) ~ 3/1/2012 1:03 PM

Thank you everyone for the critique! I appreciate all you had to say and I am taking everything into consideration as I begin this write this.

And thank you, Chris. I'm trying my hardest. haha. :)